many people say that a person`s success is a result of the way they have been brought up by their parents

I agree with many people and
belive
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believe
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that parenting leads to success for their
children
.
Ferstly
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Firstly
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, it is
support
family
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in
difficult
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time
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times
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.
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, it is
financial
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accompanied. For
succes
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success
kids in
future
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the future
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family aid
plying
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playing
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important
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role.
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,
in
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on
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chalenging
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challenging
days and when
man
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a man
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falls his household is always by his side.Still mother and father
support
from the financial side.
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, after
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business father does not
absndon
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abandon
his son or
doughter
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daughter
. But have
such
people who have
achievied
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achieved
their work without the
support
of the family.
Such
as
,
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children
who grew
without
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up without
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parents.These guys help each other to build the
futur
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future
.Perhaps Steve
Jobs
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owner company Apple achieved
everythink
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everything
by
yourself
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himself
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without native people.He
craeted
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created
from scratch.Was founded in 1976 by Steve Jobs and Ronald Wayne.
This
company
located
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Cupertino
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in Cupertino
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California.They produce products
such
as phones,
tablet
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tablets
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,
computer
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computers
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,
laptop
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laptops
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,audio and others.If the
placeof
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place of
support
is
ti
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to
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spoil the
children
then
they will not be able to master the
hurd
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hard
life in the future.You need to
support
the
children
.You are building the future you are like
arrowe
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arrow
arrows
showing where to go.
Everythink
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Everything
is in your hands
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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