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All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity, How could it be tackled?

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Nowadays a bunch of people deal with obesity disease. Which
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the excuse
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 getting increased. Corpulency
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 time seeing that the pattern of dietary
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 is bad. Mostly society believed that as long as they eat less food
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everything
 will run well. In the fact,
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 pattern to consume a meal without
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balance with exercise is the highest potential
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cure
 fatness. One
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 some cake or other
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fat develop easily. Based
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the case
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obesity, it can cope by
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 the life
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style
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particularly
 the rut of food, physical training, and slumber. By
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 wisely and
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 in some particular
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period
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 thing to be consistent and have a good mindset to reach the goal. In nutshell regarding
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 case, it's preferable to notice the food normally consume with doing
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, the body can
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