Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The advertisement

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appears on any information platform

such

as television and social media. While some

people

argue that many

advertisings

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advertisements

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successfully influence

people

to buy some products, others think that they pay less attention

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adverts because of

its

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their

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long duration.

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both

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on both

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of these views and I will give my personal opinion.

To begin

with,

people

tend to purchase things after watching some promotions which have been made with attractive approaches. Several big brands create unique adverts and

co-operate

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cooperate

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with a famous public

figure

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figures

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For instance

, Vespa produces a special motor unit which involves Justin Bieber as the brand ambassador. As a consequence, Justin Bieber influences his fans to own and purchase that product. Indeed,

this

spends a huge expenditure on its production.

However

, Vespa undergoes significant sales after launching that special

adds

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ads

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. On contrary, other

people

currently have less interest to watch any

due to its long duration.

Sometime

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, one

takes 5

until

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10 minutes to display

their

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its

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content. In my point of view, it is necessary to have an efficient time and keep its interesting values.

For example

, when

people

watch a video on Youtube, they commonly get distraction by the

adds

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ads

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that suddenly appear on their screen. Because of its long duration,

people

will ignore or directly skip the

to continue the video they watch.

Therefore

, some

adds

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ads

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fails

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to deliver their information and sales to the audience. In summary, while some

people

consider advertisements can persuade them to buy a product, others prefer to ignore them. An

should not only be impactful to attract

people

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attention but

also

should be short.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

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endorsement
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Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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