Nowadays many people prefer to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
These days many
peoples
mostly adolescents tend to buy Use synonyms
high end
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high-end
luxury
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items
including Use synonyms
outer wears
, shoes and purses. Correct your spelling
outerwears
Then
why do people Linking Words
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give
is
many other affordable options available? From what I see, I would consider it as Change the verb form
are
a
neither positive nor negative development.
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Firstly
, Linking Words
high end
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high-end
such
as Gucci, Hermes and many others put value Linking Words
first
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this
I mean, possessing a Linking Words
long lasting
good quality product Add a hyphen
long-lasting
it
could save you from unnecessary shopping travels in the Correct pronoun usage
apply
further
years, and making waste every few years that will do great damage to mother earth. Another great example of buying Linking Words
luxury
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items
Use synonyms
it
could never go out of fashion Correct pronoun usage
apply
trends
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trend
huge
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a huge
stroll
in society that would only Fix the agreement mistake
strolls
last
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few
years. Correct article usage
a few
This
will lead to, mass clothing waste unlike high ends brands goods.
As a counter-argument, Linking Words
modern
days many naive and young Change preposition
in modern
peoples
are being more eager to buy those fancy Use synonyms
items
, to purchase what they want they would get loans Use synonyms
out of
banks or pressure their parents to purchase for them. As Change preposition
from
a
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generation where many adolescents make friends based on their wealth and popularity not on their personality or having things in common. Correct article usage
the Z
As a result
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peoples
mostly teenagers believe owning and being clothed in priced Use synonyms
items
will help them to become more valued in Use synonyms
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, pupils Linking Words
those
days Change preposition
in those
tends
to bully Change the verb form
tend
another student
who doesn’t own any Fix the agreement mistake
other students
luxury
products and make them Use synonyms
shame
of their school. Add an article
the shame
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,
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apply
stuffs
create Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
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difference
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the difference
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becomes
to
bullying.
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for
As
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In
a
conclusion, I would say that owning popular brand Correct article usage
apply
items
should only be accessible to those who earn money and Use synonyms
reasonable
at their finance Add a missing verb
are reasonable
managements
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management
in other words
adults. Other than Linking Words
that
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that people
those peoples
peoples
who are younger Use synonyms
in
their age would not fully understand the meaning of possessing Change preposition
apply
high end
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high-end
luxury
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items
. People who made the money would understand its values.Use synonyms
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