Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The choice
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is the many alternatives way that
people
can decide in their life. In
this
era, many
people
tend to feel confused due to the existence of too many
choices
that
people
have. In my opinion, I strongly disagree
on
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this
statement. I believe that as many as possible
choices
that
people
have, giving more
advevantages
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advantages
outweigh the disadvantages in their lives. I base my argument on several reasons.
To begin
with, having many
choices
in
lifes
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life
is an
eassiness
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easiness
and a dream that many
people
in the past want to. In the 19th century, many
people
could not select their destiny
such
as the work they want to, the education field they like,
even
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or even
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the spouse they love.
For example
, in
Indonesian
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the Indonesian
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context before the Independence, many
people
in Indonesia since they
born
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were born
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will become
the
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apply
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farmers until they passed away. Especially the women, in that era
they
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apply
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cannot choose their destiny unlike
to become
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becoming
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the
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housewives only.
Hence
, contemporary
society
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society's
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own freedom to choose their life is more fortunate than
no
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not
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having freedom completely.
Furthermore
, having many
choices
in
lifes
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life
life's
means
that
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apply
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having many opportunities to try
what
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apply
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the
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is the
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best choice for
people
. In essence,
lifes
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life
life's
is an occasion
to
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for
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trial and error on
everythings
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everything
. Because of that too many
choices
is not the
drawbacks
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drawback
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for
people
but
it
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apply
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is
the
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a
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grace for
human
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a human
the human
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being
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beings
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.
For instance
, in some country which does not have
freedom
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the freedom
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to choose like North Korea,
people
only have one opportunity to choose their
job
. After
this
opportunity,
beside on
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besides
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their enjoyment in their
job
, they can not change their
job
until they die.
Thus
, if they do
failure
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fail
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in their
job
then
they
fired
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are fired
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by
office
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the office
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, so
in
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apply
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their entire life they will be jobless. In conclusion,
have
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having
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many
choices
in
lifes
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life
is the Graces and Luckiness for
people
nowadays because it is an easiness and occasion
to
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for
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trial and error for
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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