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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. Whats your opinion?

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The chart below shows the percentage of
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in
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owned and rented in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. The bar chart provides information about the proportion of
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in
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owned and rented
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 in England and Wales during the period from 1918 to 2011. Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of
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the apartment
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apartment
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apartments
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 which were bought increased, whereas the proportion of
building
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rented decreased over the whole period.
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, in 1971, the figures for both items stood at the same number. In 1918, more everyday renting reconciliation than everyday owning compromise
were
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 chosen, approximately 87% and roughly 23%,respectively.
Although
renting
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building
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 was more popular than buying
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 from 1939 to1961,the statistics for both stayed at 50% in 1971.
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, the proportion of
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building
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 was less than the owning building in 1981, 40% and 60%, respectively. During the rest of the period, owning
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a building
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building
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buildings
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 was more universal than renting
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the building
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building
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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