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In a number of countries some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing high speed railway lines for inter-city travel. Others believe this money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Opinions are divided as to whether a great amount of money should be spent on establishing fast
trains
 to connect other cities rather than developing available public
transport
.
Although
 there are some advantages to having high-speed
trains
, in my view, the maintenance of current public
transport
 is
also
 essential. In
this
 essay, I will show both viewpoints and my own opinion. On the one hand, citizens in each country
initially
 work in other provinces.
This
 indicates that the utilization of
trains
 is necessary to go across the cities increasingly to save time. If governments invest to establish railways, people who work in rural areas will have more convenience in travelling.
For instance
, most industrialized factories in Thailand commence being located in the countryside,
such
 as in Rayong province, which there is a
further
 distance from Bangkok that it takes to drive for 5 hours.
This
 shows that workers who live in the capital have to wake up early and take a long time to go there.
This
 is the reason why governments ought to construct it.
In addition
, investment in high-speed railways is not only one way to persuade travellers to considerably visit the city, but
also
 to get the country's earnings in tourism.
However
, some people debate that improving public
transport
 has more benefits.
First
 of all, public
transport
 these days are used for a long time which should maintain them to be up-to-date for preventing an
accident
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accidents
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. Due to some buses in Thailand which have been utilized for more than 20 years, fire often happens.
As a result
, passengers were injured. Another point is that the number of public
transport
 nowadays is not enough for citizens' needs. In conclusion, even though the existence of public
transport
 is not maintained which leads to accidents, in my view, constructing high-speed
trains
 to travel in the cities is more urgent to tackle for enhancing the quality of the citizens and countries’ income.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-speed rail
  • inter-city travel
  • economic growth
  • environmentally friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • reliability
  • service frequency
  • cost-effective
  • initial investment
  • accessibility
  • underserved areas
  • regional needs
  • budget constraints
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