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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that particular species of
plants
 and
animals
 becoming extinct is the majority of environmental problems, while others argue that there are
also
 other issues to be significant. Despite the fact that losing
plants
 and
animals
 is the main problem, I believe that other problems are
also
 essential. In
this
 essay, I will show viewpoints and explain my own opinion. On the one hand, one of the reasons why
plants
 and
animals
 are becoming extinct is deforestation which most humans these days increasingly cut off the trees where there are the habitats of
animals
.
This
 causes them to lose their habitats and
finally
 die out.
Furthermore
, some species do not have numbers nowadays, but specimens decide to hunt them for doing illegal business or cooking which makes them nearly die out. There are,
however
, other obstacles to facing the problem of the environment.
To begin
 with, the basic problem that many people ignore is pollution, which they always release bad pollution into the air or river.
For instance
, most industrialized factories let the contaminated substance out to the river where it makes the river contaminated with chemicals.
This
 has an impact on the fish or other species which live in the water to be in danger from
this
 contamination. Another root cause is using plenty of plastic which may lead to global warming.
This
 will have wide effects on others not only creatures
,
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 but
also
 humans and societies. In conclusion, even though losing habitat is the major factor that causes
plants
 and
animals
 to become extinct, in my view, other issues,
such
 as pollution, using plastic and global warming, are
also
 significant problems to destroy the creatures and environments to more damage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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