Some people believe that kids today are more protected than earlier generations. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?
Some people believe that
children
are well safer than the previous generations. I agree with this
statement to some extent because of a few reasons.
Children
are more secure today than earlier to some extent due to several reasons. Firstly
, parents are more aware of the future of children
because of education. In addition
, kids are provided quality education and greater health than in previous times due to the parent's disposable income. for example
, the government ensured education and various health program for the welfare of its younger population.Moreover
, the number of children
per person is lower than earlier which increases the chance of more attention and care to the limited number of children
.
On the other hand
, offspring are safer than in earlier because of the big family.heir feels more secure and safe in the joint family due to the higher number of members of the family. They got emotional support and companionship in an enormous family sizes
.scion can share their worries and concerns with family members if their parents are busy.They feel less stressed and are sedentary because of the interaction with other family members.Correct the article-noun agreement
enormous family sizes
an enormous family size
For example
, I feel more relaxed and happier in my childhood days in a joint family, but my cousin feels lonely in her nuclear family. So, offspring are safer and happier than the previous generation.
In conclusion, even though children
are important in today's world, I believe that they are safer and more content in earlier times.Submitted by geenajohn82 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite