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You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue till late night.

#graduation #party #saturday #night #people #barbecue
Dear Mr Gulchapchapbek, I'm one of your good
neighbors
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neighbours
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 and I write
this
 letter to
informing
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 you about the graduation
party
 I plan to spend the
next
 Saturday night. I understand that the
party
 may cause you inconvenience
,
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 since I invited about 50 people to enjoy the open evening that can create some noise.
In addition
, the
party
 can continue until late
night
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at night
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,
where
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 several of my friends even could sing with their
guitar
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guitars
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, enjoying
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the nights
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nights
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night
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. Of course, we will try to keep the noise and sound as low as we can, but if it worries you, I would like to apologize to you in advance. But
on the other hand
,
instead
 of just sitting at home, you can
also
 join our
party
 because if you do it, I certainly guarantee you that we will do everything to make sure you enjoy our
party
. In fact, we will feel
honorable
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 if you join our
party
. With respect, Maga Zakirov
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