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the best way to reduce crime amongst young people is to teach parents good parenting skill. Do you agree or disargee ?

#crime #people #parents #skill #disargee
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The best way
reduce
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to reduce
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 crime
amongst
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among
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 young people is to teach
parents
 good printing skills. I agree with these ideas The biggest problem is
that
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apply
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the violation of the rules
that
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which
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 is theft performed by minor
children
. So that
children
 do not grow up to be thieves, they need to be brought up. But even there are
parents
 who are ill-mannered themselves to be brought up, must have education and
disciplineif
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discipline if
discipline
parents
 do not have education, how will they make their
children
 educated
.
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 I think to give the concept to
parents
 so that they bring up a good child. It is necessary to regulate
children
prohibit
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and prohibit
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 going out in the evening on the street,
make
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 them friends with a well-behaved child it is important. Some hooligans who cannot be brought up are brought up by the police but
this
 is not right. The job of the police is to catch criminals and not to educate them but they should be brought up by their
parents
.
Parents
 don't know how to raise
children
 it is necessary to give an idea of the homeland it's very important for parenting.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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