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Social Media has helped us increase our virtual networks. This has isolated us physically, making us socially awkward in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
modern
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 era, one of the advancements in technology
that
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is social
media
 has influenced all human beings irrespective of age. Due to social
media
, we can connect with
people
 without meeting them personally which has made the physically inactive leading to antisocial
people
. I am completely in
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 of
this
 statement.
This
 essay will decipher my viewpoint. Nowadays, Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, and many more have become a crucial part of each individual. We spent most of our leisure time on social
media
 whereas earlier we were occupied with outdoor games, and visiting relatives
however
,
this
 has changed now. The pendulum has swung the other way. Being busy with laptops and smartphones has led us to become anti-social
people
 because we have lost the habit of interacting with
people
 physically else we make a connection over the internet. Owing to
this
 we are unable to develop interpersonal skills and be comfortable in our own space.
For Example
, during the pandemic time
people
 were dependent on social
media
 to enhance their network but after the lockdown lifted humans were not comfortable with face-to-face interaction making them socially awkward.
Moreover
, presently our youth is leaning on Instagram, Snapchat, and Facebook to make new connections. They chat, play, and study on
this
 platform only.
This
 has become a small world to them
as a result
 they have become less confident in facing interviews and the problem of stage fear has
also
 developed in children.
Hence
, due to
this
 routine, they are resulting into a socially awkward person. To conclude usage of social
media
 has made
people
 less confident while having face-to-face interaction as they have become comfortable with the chat process, which is a way of communication.
Consequently
, they have locked themselves in a room leading to creating an anti-social society.
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