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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this overweight the disadvantages?

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These days, there are different types of education system teaching.
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 of them is that
home-education
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 is being preferred by numerous parents rather than the primitive way of learning within
school
 premises. In my opinion, there are some benefits:
however
, these pale in comparison with the potential drawbacks.
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one
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one
 of the advantages is that, If
children
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taught
individual
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 is it more effective than
school
 education. As well as, it is comfortable
for
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 every way
such
 as the child
study
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studying
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 hard in the process of individual education and
does
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not get disturbed
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 his peers during the lesson.
In addition
, they feel independent
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which
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 is why they can express their opinions without shame at
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individual time.
For instance
,
one
 of my
nephew
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which
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is
study
 in the home-education and
compare
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him
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to my other
nephew
 who attended
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public
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school
that
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 is why they are many
different
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 between them.
Moreover
, my
nephew
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go
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to
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 public
school
 can not express his opinion in public but my other
nephew
 can express his clearly without fear.
On the other hand
,
one
 of the disadvantages is that
children
 who
study
 alone become isolated,
as a result
, of which they can not develop an outgoing personality character, so they can not freely communicate with their peers. As well as, ununderstanding how to cooperate with others and communication skills in the same age groups are
also
 essential for each child.
For example
, teachers organized
different
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kind
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 of activities related
with
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study
 in
school
.
As a result
,
children
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interested
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 in
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a study
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study
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studying
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by
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 them. In conclusion, I believe its disadvantages overweight the benefits that teaching
children
 at home rather than sending them to
school
 because
children
 can not access many professional instructing resources and get collective experiences.
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