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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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After the technological boosts in the agricultural industry, there are
people
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 who still cannot feed themselves all over the world. In my opinion, many factors can cause a lack of
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, and we require different strategies to tackle
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 problem. Technological developments can't solve the
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 problem once and for all. Usually, an advanced invention happens in a developed
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, not a developing
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, but the
food
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 shortage often exists in a developing
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. In
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 case, the advanced yields in the agriculture industry are unable to reach the needy population. For developing
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, the cost of importing
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 can largely be over their budgets. The final result is that
people
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 in these
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 are still starving, while
people
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 from the developed world wasting their
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.
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, the root reasons for famine can be the poor quality of the soil, lack of water, extreme weather condition, and so on, which are still uncurable today. As to the actions we can take to mitigate the
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 problem, here are several possible suggestions.
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, developed
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 that have an advanced agriculture system should launch international aid for
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 in need around the world.
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,
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 with advanced high-tech tools should send their top scientists to help a
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 that suffered from
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 shortage with its agricultural equipment and natural resources.
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, we can set up a charitable organization to raise money for those starving
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 and send
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 to their homes.
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, the whole human species should regardless of its discrepancies and keep developing agricultural science at the same time. In conclusion, with the fact that many
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 are under starvation in an advanced agriculture background, we need to find out the root reason for
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 shortage -
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 the resources not being in the right places- and act like a union to help the starving population to feed themselves.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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