you are unable to attend the farewell party for your manager at work” tell him: o Why you can’t come? o Tell them what you valued about working for him/her: o wish him the best

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Ibrahim, Thank you for the invitation to your leaving party on Saturday. Regrettably, I am unable to attend. Unfortunately, the date for your leaving party coincides with my wedding anniversary and my husband has already booked tickets for us to see the Lion King at the Royal Albert theatre in the evening. I am disappointed that I shall miss

this

special occasion and not have the opportunity to celebrate your retirement. I would like to thank you for being

such

a supportive manager. I remember on the

first

day of work you made sure to make me feel welcome as a shy 20-year-old intern and always helped me recognize my strengths. It is because of you I have received several promotions throughout the past year. I wish you a wonderful and well-deserved retirement, Mr Ibrahim. I hope it includes many happy hours golfing and that you are able to take that cruise I know you always wanted to. Best Wishes, Zeinab Mahgoub

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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you are unable to attend the farewell party for your manager at work” tell him: o Why you can’t come? o Tell them what you valued about working for him/her: o wish him the best

Fully explain your ideas

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, prefer to take risks and think that change is a positive thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the popluation in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

These days, cell (mobile) phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?