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It is common these days to see celebrities advertising diffent products? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, famous people are actively engaged in the endorsement of products through advertising campaigns. I personally believe, despite providing
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 on the specific product or service, the drawbacks including misleading the audience by pretending a different behaviour and convincing a fake value for the product are over excess the benefits. To commence with, some iconic people in society provide
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 on some products through their personal profiles on social media convincing the general public that
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 items are regularly consumed by them. For an instance, Ronaldo was an ambassador of a reputed sports ware brand and it was highlighted throughout his Facebook updates soon after commencing the FIFA world cup-2022.
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, most of his
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 followed his dressing style even during the gameplay.
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, providing wrong
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 with a pretended character and behaviour is not acceptable.
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, his beloved
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 are misled by a different act and behaviour.
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, the products and services are promoted with an excessive value which is not really worth for. Since young
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 overvalue the item and purchase it at a high cost. Though Kim Kadireshan does not apply Fa body odour control items, it implies
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a necessary fragrance for daily application which leads her
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 to try the product. In conclusion, if the intention of the celebrity is to provide detailed
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 about
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 amount,
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 it is a complementary work for the benefit of society, but
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 details are manipulated and wrong due which overweigh the advantages of it.
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