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The annual income of three bakeries in Calgary in 10 years

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This
 graph describes
about
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the annual
income
 of
Amandine
bakery
,
Mari
bakeshop
, and
Bolo
 cakery which is located in Calgary during 2000-2010. As shown in the graph, there are prominent features which are uprising trends in
Bolo
 and
Amandine
bakery
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bakeries
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 while
Mari
bakeshop
 has plummeted gradually by the end of 2008. Both
Bolo
 cakery and
Amandine
bakery
have
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increased their
income
 after 2005. From 2000 to 2005, the
income
 of
Amandine
bakery
 remained stable while the
income
 of
Bolo
 cakery stayed the same during
2003
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-2006 period. The annual earnings of
Mari
bakeshop
 fluctuated throughout the years until it took a hit in 2007. The annual
income
 of
Amandine
bakery
 has significantly doubled from 60,000 dollars per year within a span of three years. The
income
 varied
within
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 60,000 - 100,000 dollars
within
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from
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 2000 - 2005 in
Mari
bakeshop
. There was a 50
percent
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 reduction in the yearly earnings of
Mari
bakeshop
 from 2004 to 2007. Overall, the annual
income
 of three bakeries in Calgary has varied within
past
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the past
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 10 years and by the end of 2010 two bakeries thrived while one
bakery
 has a great reduction in their
income
.
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