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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today's life, while others believe history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
things
 learnt during schooling are of no use for day-to-day
life
 and few
people
 believe that
things
 that we learn at every stage of
life
 are beneficial in
one
 or the other way.
This
 essay will discuss both views and conclude whether our learnings are important at every stage of living. On the
one
 hand, we learnt many
things
 at school which we are not using on daily basis even, the lesson which we studied more with a lot of difficulties is
history
.
History
 of all the
things
such
 as world wars,
life
 stories of some great personalities and years in which kingdom has found we never use
this
 information anywhere in our lives.
However
, during childhood, we worked hard to get it passed and even teachers taught us that it is very important for our future. For an instance, during my
schooling
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 I once got failed in
history
 and got punished by both teachers and
also
 in my family. I still do not know why
people
 give a lot of importance to subjects that are taught in schools.
On the other hand
, a few topics in
history
 are enormously useful for our day-to-day
life
.
Such
 topics are the Mahabharata, Ramayan and the
life
 stories of Freedom Fighters.
One
 should always remember there is always a moral of
life
 behind
history
 which we can tell to our children and grandchildren.
For example
, the moral in Ramayana is that
one
 as a leader should be very loyal like Rama to their
people
. It can be compared
similarly
 to politics where a leader should always take care of their
people
 and the growth of a country. In conclusion, there are both positive and negative sides to learning
history
 that I believe to some extent it is very useful in our lives and teaches us morals of
life
.
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