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In recent years, "responsible tourist" have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist" To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the increase in the number of visitors to
tourist
 sites, nowadays, It has become a common thing to see used objects and containers thrown around
tourist
 sites. Even worse, some foreigners who come to
visit
 try to brainwash the local
people
 and debunk their
culture
. Recently,
People
 who have observed
this
 has tried to organize a movement to try to avoid these and be
responsible
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tourist
.
However
, despite their claim, they are yet to get the trust of the public as many
people
 believe it is impossible for every
tourist
 to be responsible. In
this
 essay, I will give my opinion on how hard it is to generalise for large groups of visitors and how it should be claimed and understood
instead
. There are many visitors who really care and worry about the places they usually go to
visit
. And they usually come up with innovative ideas on how to improve the system in handling the preservation of
culture
 and
environment
.
For instance
,
last
 year 8 Australian
tourists
 who went to
visit
 a historical place in Sudan found the
environment
 around to be in an alarming state. and Immediately after they went back home they were able to raise funds that will be used to clean the surroundings and renovate the historical area. So,
although
 not every
tourist
 is responsible, there are genuine
tourists
 who want to protect the
environment
 they go to
visit
. Needless to say,
however
, there is a large swath of
people
 who does things that harm the
tourist
 sites. Some don't care about the objects they use and where they throw them. And others are busy trashing the local
culture
 just because it doesn't align with their way of living or the
culture
 they came from.
For instance
, during the
last
 world cup
people
 were criticizing Qatar for not allowing similar-gender marriage and trying to impose their own
culture
.
Therefore
, saying every
tourist
 will be responsible is impractical. But at the same time, we can not generalize the acts of some bad
people
 to every
tourist
 as there are many good
tourists
 who genuinely want to protect the
culture
 and
environment
. So, the narrative that responsible
tourists
 have started to pay attention to protecting the
environment
 should not be taken literally and it should not be understood negatively. It
instead
 should be encouraged and the
people
 who took the initiative to start the movement should be appreciated as
this
 is how things improve and eventually it might become a norm for every
tourist
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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