Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantage of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
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modern era, visiting
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become more common,for spending the whole day with families and even tourists.In my opinion , letting
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go to
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for free is more beneficial for both the government and individual
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, I will discuss in
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better .
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, the government having a lot of
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come to the country will increase the economy in profitable ways,meaning a lot of sectors will get those benefits,
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as airports, hotels,shops and food sectors.A country with attractive
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will be a spot for
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from all over the world,if these
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do not charge for entrance
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would to
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visit them and advise their friends to go to these
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and have a tour.The aim of the government is to have million and million of
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and
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will lead to many different political and economic outcomes.
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. I believe that paying nothing can certainly help
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save their money,
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this
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is not the only reason for
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belief these
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can contribute to educating
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about the country and the society's culture. May anyone will ask what is the benefit of educating
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about the traditional culture, the answer will be simple if the new generation learns more about their ancestors
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they will have a flourishing future.Recent university studies claim that the need for knowledge of the past is the master key to gaining a pour success in the meantime. To sum up, while we hope all
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do not charge
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, these
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must introduce new attractive educational methods.
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