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Some think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some people argue, that too much
money
 has been spent on repairing old
buildings
, so one should knock down the old
buildings
 and develop modern ones. I believe that building new modern
buildings
 would be beneficial and reduce the
maintenance
 cost.
First
 of all, most of the residents nowadays have no time to look after society's welfare and
maintenance
, like leaking water, cracks on the floor etc. Neglecting all these factors leads to a poor building and the risk for people increases.
For example
, there was a society named Madhuban in Mumbai which was constructed 20 years ago and the residents have invested a lot of
money
 in the
maintenance
 of the apartment.
Although
 they spent a huge amount of
money
 on welfare, the issue was not resolved. Ultimately they stopped investing
money
 in renovation and the building collapsed.If they had built a modern building
instead
 of repairing the old one it would have been beneficial for the folks.
Secondly
, technology and construction methodologies have come a long way now. Many modern techniques are used to construct
buildings
 in a manner where they use eco-friendly materials and smart gadgets while construction.
This
 results in less
maintenance
 work which is cost-friendly.
For instance
, an old building built in Rajasthan was made of poor material, the residents were evacuated and a new building was developed with smart technologies and good civil materials. The engineers installed solar panels and the building was working on solar energy.
This
 resulted in saving a lot of electrical energy.
Thus
, rather than repairing, developing new
buildings
 is a reliable option. In conclusion, I adhere to demolishing old
buildings
 and constructing new modern
buildings
. As people want a safe roof to live in, where they don't have to pay a lot of
money
 for the
maintenance
 of
buildings
.
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