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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Enhancement in technology today with no doubt has made our lives convenient but more complicated. Globally, many employees and
students
 have started working from home which has both pros and cons. I shall discuss my views in the upcoming paragraphs. It can not be denied that
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 working from home has numerous benefits.
To begin
 with, people whether
students
 or
adults
 had to travel long distances to reach their schools and job places now can simply sit in their bedrooms or study rooms and carry their
work
 comfortably.
This
 will lead to less congestion on roads which was mainly due to the overload of school buses and private vehicles leading to workplaces. Their professional as well as personal lives will be balanced and will get more time to relax when they are freed up from their
work
 for some time. A recent survey conducted by the News channel, Today and Tomorrow, after Corona pandemic showed that the performance of
adults
 had improved drastically when they worked from home which resulted in higher sales and good academic performances. On the flip side, young often get distracted when they see gadgets near them and their parents roaming around doing household chores. There are high chances of copying assignments and solutions of their
work
 from the internet when they don't have teachers around to keep an eye on them.
Adults
 start becoming obese and have sedentary lifestyles. It not only has
bad
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 impact on health but
students
 start losing eyesight at an early age.
Furthermore
, during online classes, children rather than focusing on
studies
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, open other websites and start looking at filthy content present on them which
make
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 them go astray.
In addition
, moonlighting has
also
 become a serious issue these days which has arisen mainly due to the employees who are working online and tend to do jobs in multiple companies. To conclude, working online has become a trend these days but organisations should keep a check that
adults
 should follow the rules and regulations appropriately and should not do anything
that is
 inappropriate to the company's guidelines. There should be specific days in a week where employees and
students
 are required to
work
 online and
offlne
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 to maintain
balance
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 between the two.
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