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Nowadays, people in some countries can choose to live and work anywhere they want because of the improvement in transportation and communication technologies. Discuss the benefits and the drawbacks of the phenomenon

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In the current scenario,
masses
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 prefer to live and work at any location, as they desire due to the revolution in transportation and communication. The main positive of
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development
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 is to live in
home
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the home
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 city,
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However
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 the main negative is the wastage of time and money.
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, for
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globalization,
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time and distance are no longer barriers to
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international trade and exchange like teleconferencing
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 of
improvement
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the improvement
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of
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in
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 communication means and transport.
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, for education, all kinds of
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teaching approaches
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 as distance learning allow teachers and students to work more efficiently and effectively.
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, for our daily life, people could live or work at any place they are willing to, even miles away from their hometown as they could be back home easily by bus, underground, private car, fairy, flight and so on and stay in touch with their family at any time by the means of communication
equipments
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equipment
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.
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, everything has a negative side. While we enjoy the
comforting
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 and luxury of our dwelling derived from the
development
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 of science and technology, we have to realize that some
damages
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damage
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on
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to
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 human health and
living
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the living
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 environment
also
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 have been occurred inevitably. As we
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, the
development
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 of the automobile industry has
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intensified the consumption of
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natural resources and the pollution of
environment
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the environment
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. Another notable problem is that people are becoming more and more
over dependent
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over-dependent
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 on using all types of digital devices. Some
researches
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researchers
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 have shown that these kinds of products would generate
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new human illnesses and would have
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 negative effect on some abilities of
human
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humans
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such
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 problem solving without those products. Overall, everything has two sides, positive and negative.
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,
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advanced science and technology give us
more
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a more
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 convenient and more comfortable life;
meanwhile
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 it
also
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 has
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 negative fallout. But in my view, the advantages of
this
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 should outweigh its disadvantages because
development
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 is the only meaning of the existence of mankind. The key point should be
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how
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 we are going to minimize the risks
resulted
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by
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from
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development
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 and take all
outcome
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outcomes
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 of
development
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 into consideration on the ground of
concept
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the concept
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 of sustainability.

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