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in their adversising, bussineses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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in our present time, business owners use advertising to State and confirm that their sales are unique and new in some way, the main reason behind
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 is to increase the purchase percentages, and in
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 essay, we will shed light on its bane and boon. *to Commence, one of the main benefits, is
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 may catch so many eyes, and eventually, everyone wants to keep up with the new and unique items, for the idea of owning Something brand new, catches our attention,
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, when I graduated high school, my father told me he will get me a car, was waiting for that brand new car of mine, when it turns out to be old I was disappointed.
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 may help the product to become prominent across the globe.
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, business owners become so desperately trying to sell things,
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 they make the product seems like a wonder in the advertising,
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, people often get disappointed, and Think that they have been manipulated,
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 may cause a serious problem to the owner, to be famous as a hustler,
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, I heard a story about a man that fool people to buy from him, at
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 he becomes so well known in the market. between the vendors, but as soon as he got caught no one buy from them again he needed to close the shop.
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, in my opinion, the businessman should focus on making a good reputation for their product and the way to treat purchasers to gain a high profit, not by false advertising in conduction, like any subject,
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 has its positive and negative sides, but the main point is to increase the profit, by setting moral values and never fooling the purchaser.
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