IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for travelers.

#people #case #travelers
In
this
 modern era, the majority of folks like to go abroad as tourists, though it brings a lot of advantages.In my opinion, for those ,folks there are many different advantages,which I came through in
this
 essay and find out more points .
First
 of all, tourists spend a lot of money in their holidays travelling somewhere for having rest from their previous busy life,
such
 as moving to countryside areas to have a quiet lifestyle.The aim of
this
 action is mainly to change their daily life routines,
this
 gives them new energies that help them to go back to work in fantastic mode. These days spent travelling will certainly lead tourists to be healthier, recent studies on a group of students five of ten show great performance in their exams that are done after finishing travelling that proves that how should people go abroad and have a good time.
secondly
, having travelled time can surely educate people and learn a lot of different knowledge . there are various types of cities and cultures around the world , to gain
this
 knowledge we should go everywhere and meet a new world. In some , countries the government encourage students and teacher as well to travel and stay for a long whether travelling to developed counties or to normal counties, meaning that those students and teachers will come back with new educational methods. To sum up, since the old era people had travelled to gain loaves of bread and knowledge and for
this
, I believe there are huge advantages we still do not know about travelling.
Submitted by saeedra358 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: