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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others, however, believe that government should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #responsibility #individuals #care #health #diet #government #citizens
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Societies have differed with regard to the question of who should be the ruler of the
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 public, some think that it is our role as public, whereas others argue that all is the local government's job.In my opinion, I see that both the public and the
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 can be together to promote our
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 habits. On the one hand, the person should be a doctor , meaning in the early stage we should look after ourselves by doing healthy habits,
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 as diet, practising sports and working and living in a safe place.The aim is to avoid unhealthy common problems,
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, obesity and chronic diseases. In case any of these diseases occur
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 we must visit the family doctor, who will pay a lot of attention to having patients cured, follow the doctor's direction will lead to good results in our
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 and even prevent these diseases from transitioning to the societies.These actions can be done by people themself without the intention of the
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.
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, I believe
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 should do many different actions to have public
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 promoted, there are various types of actions that can be done by governments.
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, the important step in
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 long journey is to educate people in a scientific way,
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 as shown on TV good habits that make the public healthier and much more can be done in
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 field.
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, the
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 must supply medicines for free or even at a cheap price.,
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 they can build new hospitals in many areas to have all patients. To sum up, we will face a lot of barriers that can stop us from moving forward in the
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 sector,
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 , we can come over these barriers by doing a lot of max steps .
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