Nowadays, a vast number of
children
spend a considerable amount of
time
on their
smartphones
. In my opinion,
this
matter is big deal. Since
children
are mentally weak,
thus
they are more likely to lose their identity. I am
also
convinced that using too much technology
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children
can have many negative
effects
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their life.
It is my view that
children
can miss
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plenty of new experiences that lead to
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learning many new
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such
as music and art ,
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.
Moreover
, they are more
to find difficult to
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with
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children
in
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world
because they have spent
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deal of their
time
in a
world
.
Thus
, they can lose their real identity. In
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world
, they are vulnerable.
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, it is
important to control
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time
how
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their
smartphones
.
I
further
believe that using many hours of
smartphones
in
children
can have numerous
effects
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their
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and mind.
For instance
, they become too lazy and shy. They find it difficult to leave their
smartphones
.
Thus
,
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of technology and
smartphones
have many
effects
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children
. They miss lots of
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such
as
playWrong verb form
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with others
children
and their childhood.
In conclusion,
children
are
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part of our
world
.So, we should
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carefully about
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time
how
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on
smartphones
because they are more
.And we know
of technology
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many
effects
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children
.
Thus
, people should control their
children
in using
smartphones
.