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Computers have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids?

#computers #people #study #aids
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In today's perpetually transforming epoch , due to
advancement
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 of technology ,
people
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has
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 become
technosavvy
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techno savvy
techno-savvy
 around the globe.As a
consequences
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, the way of
study
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 of
people
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have
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 been changed by computers.I
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believe
 that
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 phenomenon has both advantages and disadvantages which I have discussed in the impending subdivisions. To commence with the advantage side of
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 trend ,
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first
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 and foremost ,it is well-known that computers are convenient
in
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study
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the study
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 .To be clear , by means of
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computer
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a computer
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 ,
one
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study
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the
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application
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,
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duolingo
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 which learns more than 100
of
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languages so
people
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 can get more knowledge
either
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in either
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one
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subjects
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 or different subjects .Apart from that , it is not only convenient but
also
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time saving
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 as
people
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study
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per
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their time.
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, due to
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computer
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computers
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,
one
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 can learn by audio -
vidio
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video
 clips.To elaborate ,
computer
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 having
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 information with images, colourful
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letters
patterns
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, as well as vidios and also, today's generation,
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vidios
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videos
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also
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, today's generation
are
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 interested in
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 type of learning method compared to book which
font
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 is sometimes small and black which is frustrating for children.While,if children learn aid of
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computer
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a computer
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 , they will learn with great enthusiasm and can crack
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the exam
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exam
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exams
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 with flying colours. To commence with the negative side of
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 development , studying with help of electronic
device
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devices
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 has
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on
health
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 of
people
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.To be specific , during
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study
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a study
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 on
computer
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one
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 have to sit down
infront
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in front
 of
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computer
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a computer
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 in
one
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 cubicle.
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 , they cannot socialize with other students as they do not have any group .
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result
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 frustration is faced by
people
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 , due to
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loneliness
.
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 , it would be harmful
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to
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eye - sight
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eyesight
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 and sometimes
people
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feels
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 back- pain , because of sitting in front of
screen
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the screen
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. To conclude , irrespective of some pros of
studing
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studying
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computer
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a computer
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 like it is convenient and
one
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 can learn by visualisation , it has some cones
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 as it has
bad
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a bad
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 effect on
mankind
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 health.
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