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Many people claim that massive investment in technology for space exploration is a wastage of money. Do you agree or disagree?

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most individuals believe that investing huge amounts of money in some technologies in the field of
space
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 exploration projects is equal to wasting that investment. I believe that
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 phenomenon has both merits and demerits while positive points eclipse drawbacks for a number of justifications. On the one hand, spending massive amounts of money resources on investigating
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 and other galaxies could be a waste of budget which can be used for vital issues on the
Earth
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, postponing more important projects like famine or urgent health issues on
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 for
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 exploration can cost a fortune. From another angle, searching other planets and galaxies have some plus points. Primarily, these searches can result in finding life on other planets which could be a good sign for finding new resources like minerals or even new
Earth
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 for humans to settle there.
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, seeing
Earth
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 from up in
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 could be a helpful method for knowing any other important influential factors for a better life on
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, for ,example
wheather
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whether
 procrastinating by satellites or putting radars for different usages. In conclusion, despite the possible waste of money in these types of projects, from my
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 the benefits of
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 risky investment in technologies especially cutting-edge ones in unknown spaces outweigh the downsides of that.
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