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n some countries, parents expect their children to spend long time studying both in and after school and have less free time. What are the positive and negative effects on children and society they live in

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It is argued in some nations that
children
 should spend more
time
in
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expanding their
knowledge
instead
 of other activities. In my opinion,
this
 trend has a negative effect on
children
 ,and the drawbacks surpass the benefits. On the one hand, there is the main reason why parents want their
children
 to learn both in and after
school
 lessons. Because of having better
the
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cognitive ability,
children
 are able to reach education
knowledge
 easily and level up their scores. When
children
 study well, they can easier to broaden their horizontal in other fields of
knowledge
.
This
 lead to
children
 can achieve higher prizes in
school
,
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 and
become
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 their
parents’
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pround
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proud
around
.
On the other hand
,
although
this
 trend has its own benefits, it has worse impacts on juniors. They often spend half a day
time
 to join
school
 classes, and after
school
time
,
children
 should participate in outdoor activities to develop in other aspects. If parents still want their
children
 to continue the process of gaining
knowledge
 after
school
,
this
 lead to
children
 not
able
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 to have
a
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holistic development. They need to play sports to improve their mental health
,
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 and join other social activities to increase their visibility of social.
Moreover
, lack of free
time
 can transfer
children
 to isolate to the social. It is an acute drawback in the future of
children
 because they are difficult to get on well with everyone. In conclusion,
although
 spending both
in
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 and after lesson
time
 in
school
 assist
children
 to learn faster, it
also
 affects their health and their. From my point of view, I
belived
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believed
believe
 that
children
 need the fully grown by gaining
knowledge
 parallel with playing sports.
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