Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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changed considerably,

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the

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’s positions have undergone more than the rest age group people. I totally agree with the

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statement, believing that the new world has a noticeable potential to harm

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through junk

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and computer games, and two powerful organs, family and school, can manage these

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it can be seen that people tend to consume fast

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not having enough time, in spite of international health organs struggling.

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, the

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are accustomed to having junk

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as a normal nourishment.

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, they are deprived of healthy nourishment and needless to say, they suffer from various diseases. As a vivid example, in

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youngsters have a lot of allergic

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which can

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by parents and

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the educational system.

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if they provide healthy

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for them, the

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will

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remarkably.

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regarding the technology era, the young generation spends significant time playing computer games.

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, they have fewer physical activities in comparison with the past.

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, they will have been lazy, unfit and patient.

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for kids are common these days.

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, the lack of confidence among young people is a dramatic result of it. Eventually, society confronts unhealthy kids more than in the past and it continues to do so.

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are exposed to terrible conditions owing to the new lifestyle and I totally agree with

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. Both of the most important power hand, family and school, can manage

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challenge and help

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to avoid consuming unhealthy

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and

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overusing computers for entertainment.