In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of studying them to school. Do you think the advantages of this overweight the disadvantages?

Education plays one of the main
rolls
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in the lives of children.
Hence
, many parents prefer distance education which is educating learners at
home
.
Nevertheless
,
although
studying at
home
includes more benefits I support the opposite side which is studying at school because they will be disciplined and
the
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they
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can feel the atmosphere of real learning. On the right hand, educating at
home
has a plus. There
some
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children of poor families or
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of them live in rural areas for
this
reason they do not always have money for public vehicles. Take
for example
my
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classmate. Even though he lives in the countryside he
study
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at school number 15 which is located in the city.
Therefore
, he is often late to his lessons and sometimes he misses them when the weather is bad. After all
these
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his
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was offered to study at
home
and that was agreed by his parents.
Consequently
, now he studies at
home
and he says that it was plus for
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the budget
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of my parents.
On the other hand
, studying at
home
could impact to
outlook
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the outlook
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of
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a student
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student
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students
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and even
communication
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their communication
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with
his
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their
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peers from
bad
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the bad
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side.
For instance
, though my neighbour's son entered
to
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university he studied at
home
for about 10 years. As a consequence, I often talk to him on the phone and he says that it is difficult to socialize with my peers because of
lack
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of interpersonal skills. In conclusion,
although
educating at
home
has more pluses I prefer to study at school because I compete in different subjects win my classmates and we share
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our knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Homeschooling
  • Tailored educational approaches
  • One-on-One Attention
  • Safe Learning Environment
  • Cost-Effective
  • Family Bonding
  • Limited Socialization
  • Potential Knowledge Gaps
  • Regulatory Challenges
  • Dependence on Parental Commitment
  • Limited Extracurricular Opportunities
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