a friend has written to you asking for advice abour a problem at work. you have had a similar problem in the past. Tell your friend you understand the problem Explain what happened to you in the past Suggest possible solutions to the problem

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Dear Abed, I hope you are doing well, thank you for reaching out to me for
an advice
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, let me tell you that I understand how frustrated you are that you didn’t get the promotion that you’ve always worked hard for,
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you are a perfect fit for it, as I was in your shoes two years ago. In 2019, I took an assignment in marketing for 3 years, I’ve worked so hard to learn everything about it , and I was keen to develop the skills needed in order to excel in
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assignment, I took an award for my dedication, commitment
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for the extraordinary efforts to make the marketing project succeed. When they
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opened a vacancy for a marketing manager it was only for external candidates only!. I still remember how demotivated I was. I ‘d like to
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you to talk to the human recourses manager in your company, asking them to open the vacancy internally
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and explain how
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is not only demotivating for you, but
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it will
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the
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loyalty towards the company.
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and write back soon. Your friend, Tala
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