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Some people say the mobile phones should be banned in SCHOOLS , to which extent do u agree or disagree?

#people #phones #schools
Mobile
phones
 are becoming a necessity
of
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 daily life.
Nevertheless
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 It has been argued that cell
phones
 should be forbidden in
schools
 because it has a negative effect on
students
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students'
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 education. In
this
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 I will argue why I totally agree that cell
phones
 should be banned in
schools
. The main reason that mobile
phones
 should be forbidden in
schools
 is that
it
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 can be a huge source of distraction for the student. If
students
 use their
phones
 during school hours, they will find it hard to concentrate during
the
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class which will lead to difficulty in understanding the subject that will eventually impact them academically. Studies have shown that when a pupil uses their
phone
 for more than 3 minutes, they will need approximately 20 minutes to gain back their focus.
For example
, teachers have noticed that after the break
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students
 commonly use their
phones
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 it requires
them
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 extra effort to get back into the “studying mood”. A
second
 reason why I believe that
phones
 should not be allowed in
schools
 is that nowadays, People are being judged
from
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 the
phone
 type they are using. To some extent
the
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social status is
being
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determined by the
phone
 type the person owns.
For instance
,
students
 could be bullied if they have an old or broken
phone
.
Therefore
, parents can be pressured financially to provide the latest
phone
 editions in order
that
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for their children not to feel inferior to their colleagues. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed why I agree that mobile
phones
 must not be allowed in
schools
 as it has a negative impact on the
students
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 academic achievements.
Also
, it could impact the
students
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 psychological status
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