Some people say the mobile phones should be banned in SCHOOLS , to which extent do u agree or disagree?

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are becoming a necessity
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daily life.
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It has been argued that cell
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should be forbidden in
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because it has a negative effect on
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students
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education. In
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I will argue why I totally agree that cell
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should be banned in
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. The main reason that mobile
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should be forbidden in
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is that
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can be a huge source of distraction for the student. If
students
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use their
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during school hours, they will find it hard to concentrate during
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class which will lead to difficulty in understanding the subject that will eventually impact them academically. Studies have shown that when a pupil uses their
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for more than 3 minutes, they will need approximately 20 minutes to gain back their focus.
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, teachers have noticed that after the break
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students
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commonly use their
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phones
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it requires
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extra effort to get back into the “studying mood”. A
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reason why I believe that
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should not be allowed in
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is that nowadays, People are being judged
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the
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type they are using. To some extent
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social status is
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determined by the
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type the person owns.
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,
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could be bullied if they have an old or broken
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.
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, parents can be pressured financially to provide the latest
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editions in order
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for their children not to feel inferior to their colleagues. In conclusion,
this
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essay discussed why I agree that mobile
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must not be allowed in
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as it has a negative impact on the
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students
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academic achievements.
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, it could impact the
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students
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psychological status

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