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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
Our days the internet became to be the most supreme way to connect people.You can find everything and everyone there.Isn'
t
 it too good to be true?
Besides
 most of the up-to-date universities provide online periods for students.From my point of
view
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 it has plenty of upsides.
However
,everything has downsides too. Let me describe some of the aspects,which in my opinion are pros.
Firstly
,as we know the world wide web can be used mostly for any work and
studing
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studying
 is not an exception.I consider that education
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 the internet is more effortless.You don'
t
 have to commute.For lots of students
that is
 the main problem.Mostly,when you graduate from school you start to live in another city,which can help you to commute faster.
However
,some students continue to live in their hometowns and that takes more time for them to get to the university.But when you are educating online you don'
t
 have to be anxious about your commuting time because it is just gone.
Secondly
,if you ask me
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when you are learning online your schedule can be more flexible.After
classes
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 you are able to find extra information about lessons or about new knowledge easily.The internet provides you with everything.You don'
t
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 spend plenty of time searching for your professor for raising a question.All you need to do is to browse it. As
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was mentioned everything has cons.University
life
 is one of the most memorable times of
life
.Hanging out with friends,discussing some problems and doing extra extracurricular events are upsides of offline
studing
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studying
.In my opinion communication in real
life
 is much easier and more important than online.
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 friendships
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 the university can help you in the future.
Life
 is unstable,your current friend can be your boss in the future.
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  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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