Influence of human beings on the world’s eco system is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

It is irrefutable fact that in recent years human activities have statically impacted biodiversity leading to the
extinction
of many endangered species. While it has various complex causes. I can propose several feasible methods
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tackling it .
First
of all, the
first
and foremost
cause
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this
negative influence on our ecosystem is overpopulation. The rise in
population
rate
bring
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to
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an increase in demand for land.
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reason is
cause
extinction
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the extinction
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of animals and
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their
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habitat.
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, people are searching new places for accommodation or other things .
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, they are cutting down forests.
In addition
, a lot of environmental issues like water contamination,
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and emissions
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from cars and vehicles are
responsiblity
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responsible
responsibility
for our loss of biodiversity.
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of
action
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affect
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the environmental ecosystem and
their
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population
.
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, the water contaminations are negatively impacting water
animals
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life.
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it is
cause
extinction
of it. There are few viable solutions to it .
Firstly
, the government should make laws to control the
population
and impose
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it
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every people.
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this
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laws should run where the trend is extremely high.
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,we should have responsibility for it. Because we must reduce using toxic things that
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will impact
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the environment
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environment
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population
.
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, we
population
cause
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due to vehicles can
be reduce
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by opting for public transport. By way of conclusion,I once again reaffirm my position that these days human activities
are negatively impact
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biodiversity. After that ,
this
phenomenon
leading
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to the
extinction
of many endangered species .
Also
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we have
solution
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for it . If we reduce using
own
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cars and toxic things, we
an
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protect environment from
extinctions
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extinction
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • ecosystem
  • deforestation
  • overexploitation
  • climate change
  • invasive species
  • regulations
  • sustainable
  • conservation
  • endangered species
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • habitat destruction
  • sustainable development
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