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The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinge upon one’s privacy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are two opinions about whether or not social
media
 has a positive impact on society.
Although
 some
people
 argue that online platforms are causing limitations to private life,
however
, others believe that it has made communication easier which I completely agree with.
To begin
 with, some major drawbacks occur due to the influence of the internet on our private lives.
Firstly
,
people
 tend to spend a lot of
time
 scrolling videos on social networks and sacrificing their
time
 which became not so valuable.
People
 nowadays become very addicted to social
media
 and they spend each their free
time
 on phones.
Although
, the reason why
people
 become so addicted to their phones could be explained pretty easily. Because most social
media
 track persons active
time
 on their phones and they suggest content which is interesting only for that specific user.
In contrast
, the popularity of Facebook and Instagram skyrocketed in concurrent times.
This
 is due to the fact that it succours to maintain relationships by virtually minimising the distance between
people
 who are in different countries.
Moreover
, one can stay in touch with their loved ones by sharing their photos and videos.
For instance
, I personally prefer uploading important events in my daily life on these network sites, so that I can keep my friends updated.
Thus
,
this
 21st-generation creation is a boon for the population seeking to initiate and sustain friendships. To conclude,
although
 modern
media
 is a double-edged sword, its advantages outweigh the issue of privacy when used appropriately.
Therefore
, it is imperative to take meticulous care to avoid
this
 turmoil.
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