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Few countries think that people aged below 30 can do things like vote for country, marriage, getting driving license etc… while most of the countries oppose. What do you think ?

#countries #people #vote #country #marriage #license #etc…
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Undoubtedly,
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 plays a very important role in daily
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 of
day to day
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life
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. There have been contrasting views of countries regarding
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 groups appropriate for voting, getting married or getting
driving
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a driving
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 license etc. Some countries believe that the perfect
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 for accomplishing these
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 is below 30 while
majority
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the majority
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 disagreed. According to me,
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 cannot be ignored for certain things but not for every task. Certainly, there are some physical or medical reasons
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 incorporating
age
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factor
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 for the
tasks
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 like voting, marriage or driving
licensce
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license
licence
.
People
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 below 30 are more
enthuastic
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enthusiastic
 towards achieving goals and have
spark
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a spark
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 of learning new skills.
This
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 energy gradually
start
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 decreasing with increasing
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 and stability. Due to hormonal changes in
body
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 which get triggered at
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a particular
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age
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,
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age
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 factor is considered crucial in getting married. Late marriages can affect reproduction resulting in unhealthy children.
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, driving is another very important skill which the person requires for his/her social, economic and career growth.
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, taking into account the present scenarios, it is highly demanding to have
driving
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 license after 18 years of
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.
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, there is another side
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 which cannot be overlooked. There are several examples in
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society which proved that
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 is just a number. Some
people
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 worked hard but achieve success in
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 part of their
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 due to maturity which grows with
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.
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, several are examples of
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which
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 were not
economicaly
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economically
 well during their childhood or young
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 and acquired education and enhanced other important skills like driving after 30 or 40 years.
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 considering all these examples, it is somewhere
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 that
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 can cause no
hinderence
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hindrance
 if the person
have
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 the
will power
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willpower
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 to acquire or learn something. In the nutshell, It can be said that
age
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factor
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factors
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 can affect
for
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certain
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 in
life
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 but it is not applicable to all situations in
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.
People
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 have different choices and different levels of
will power
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willpower
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 which can certainly break the myth of attaching
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the accuracy
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 of
task
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with
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age
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 groups.
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