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Some people believe that television programs are of no real value for children. How far do you agree or disagree

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In our modern era, a number of human being claim that
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 broadcasting
are
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actually do not play a crucial role in
toddlers
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toddlers'
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 life.I partially support above mentioned statement because youngsters can watch
television
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 to have respectable
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 content
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 leading enjoyment.
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television
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 shows are not suitable for young people for a variety of reasons.First and foremost
a
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substance abuse and offensive language may lead to some kind of negative effects.
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, youth who are
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 to drugs or alcohol waste time and
lost
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 attention to their education
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 watching a lot of unnecessary videos which
is promotes
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 on
television
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, they won't have
aptitude
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 to participate in social activities.
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, cos of their vulnerability, they are likely to acquire appropriate actions quickly
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 as roughness, aggression and derogatory language.
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, sitcoms like Kingdom of Iron
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 have transmitted a huge amount of
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 blogs to highlight the aforementioned points
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also
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 includes
development
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 of cognitive
disorder
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disorders
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 like low
level
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levels
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 brought on by exposure to
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a plethora
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 of impolite materials.
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,telecasting as a youngster has some merits.These compiling
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reasons
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 may include
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 of institutional projects that benefit youngsters significantly.
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, there are top-notch comedy shows that are ideally equipped for kids.
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, children who watch
these software
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 may learn more
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also
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have
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 a fine experience.
In
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 illustration, they will enhance their observational skills if they observe
Discovery
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the Discovery
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 channel. In conclusion, youngsters who are surrounded by violence and who are being watched
of
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television
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 will grow up with poor habits and medical conditions which is
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 will result in bettering inferential abilities and background understanding if they use it for academic and high-quality enjoyment objectives.
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