People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

Nowadays,
people
live in a highly informational time where advertising influences
people
. I believe that
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of advertising outweigh
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the disadvantages
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since promotion is a big force in our world.
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and demerits of
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commercials
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and give
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conclusion. On the one hand, publicity has a multitude of benefits
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our lifestyle.
First
of all, please to advertisements we can know about products and useful technology. Because
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big companies can promote their
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products
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to
people
and
then
customers can buy these things.
For instance
, we have
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plenty of amazing
ads
from
such
as
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companies
as
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M & M, Coca-Cola, Pepsi, Samsung,
Iphone
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iPhone
and so on. These companies are trying to attract as many customers with their bright advertising.
Secondly
, publicity can save a lot of time since
people
no longer need to look for something. We
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surrounded by
advertements
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advertisements
.
Therefore
, among these
advertisements
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we can find the thing we really need.
On the other hand
, despite on positive
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effects
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of
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the commercial
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commercial
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commercials
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we
also
have negative sides.
Firstly
, sometimes blurb can show us bad things
such
as gambling, nicotine, alcohol, financial pyramid and even drugs. These reclames can be jeopardy to
people
of all ages.
For instance
, there was
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advertisiment
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advertisement
on
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the bilboard
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bilboard
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billboard
about
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in my hometown, but indeed it was
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of drug dealers.
Secondly
, publicity can be annoying for
people
, notably for
old
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age generation. Advertisers can shoot low-quality
ads
with irritable style for
people
.
Furthermore
, they force you to watch their
ads
.
For example
,
ads
may pop up when you watch movies or series. In conclusion,
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in spite
inspite
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in spite
of
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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of advertising, the pros outweigh the cons
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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