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teelevision is dangerous because it destorus family life and any sence of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Televisions throughout the years have developed and had various versions along the way. The TV most
people
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 use today have the most
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technology
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, and they can watch almost anything on it with the help of
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 via wifi. In my opinion, having a big screen and not having divided hours to watch with families, causes a
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rift
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 between everyone.
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,
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 was introduced for the benefit of humankind, so we could acquire ease with our day-to-day tasks and make our
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lives
life
life's
 more convenient, but
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 itself with some disadvantages.
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, one of the major problems with
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 of
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 and TV is that
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 forget that they have a life to live outside the screen.
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 of young children nowadays are afraid of social interactions and grow to be antisocial.
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, we can say that television has
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 of negative effects on
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society and leaves
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 with broken
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.
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, because
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technology
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 was created by humans we
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 hold the power to control it. While the distractions are real and not many
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 are strong enough to fight the urge it can still be controlled.
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, being socially interactive is essential for individuals.
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, as observed through surveys done by the UK department of education, children who spend most of their school learning experience on tablets or iPad tend to drift from reality and many end up having depression, anxiety and ADHD. In conclusion, visiting
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 and having conversations are important to human mental stability.
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, sharing emotions and problems
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 easy when
people
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 are face-to-face talking and interacting. In my opinion, the time on interactive boards and many
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origined
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limited
 and
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,
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 time should be used in more open human interactions.

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