teelevision is dangerous because it destorus family life and any sence of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Televisions throughout the years have developed and had various versions along the way. The TV most
people
use today have the most
advance
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technology
, and they can watch almost anything on it with the help of
Internet
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the Internet
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via wifi. In my opinion, having a big screen and not having divided hours to watch with families, causes a
raft
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rift
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between everyone.
Firstly
,
technology
was introduced for the benefit of humankind, so we could acquire ease with our day-to-day tasks and make our
lifes
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lives
life
life's
more convenient, but
this
also
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itself with some disadvantages.
Additionally
, one of the major problems with
use
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the use
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of
technology
and TV is that
people
forget that they have a life to live outside the screen.
For example
,
majority
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the majority
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of young children nowadays are afraid of social interactions and grow to be antisocial.
Hence
, we can say that television has
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of negative effects on
the
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society and leaves
people
with broken
people
.
Secondly
, because
technology
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the technology
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was created by humans we
also
hold the power to control it. While the distractions are real and not many
people
are strong enough to fight the urge it can still be controlled.
Moreover
, being socially interactive is essential for individuals.
For instance
, as observed through surveys done by the UK department of education, children who spend most of their school learning experience on tablets or iPad tend to drift from reality and many end up having depression, anxiety and ADHD. In conclusion, visiting
people
and having conversations are important to human mental stability.
Also
, sharing emotions and problems
become
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easy when
people
are face-to-face talking and interacting. In my opinion, the time on interactive boards and many
technology
origined
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original
originated
items should be
limitied
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limited
and
further
,
this
time should be used in more open human interactions.
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