Some people believe that education is key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Today there is a common belief that education is a key
of
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tackling
hunger
worldwide whilst some think that
solution
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the solution
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will be
food
aid
.
This
essay agrees that education is the main key in order to solve
hunger
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the hunger
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problem
worldwide,
furthermore
, will discuss both views. On the one
hand
, meal
aid
is really uncommon since it is moderately harder. In order to help other countries in case of
hunger
, there needs to be a group of
people
who are willing to help or a government
that is
also
willing to lend
their
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helping
hand
which is already hard to attain.
Moreover
,
food
aid
has
very
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short helpful effect,
the
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reason is that consumption of
food
will satisfy
basic
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the basic
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needs of
people
without sparking them to work hard or look for a source of
food
. To illustrate, Africa suffers the most
hunger
problem
in our
world
, but no one is helping Africa since transporting and distributing
food
aid
within the African continent became extremely expensive and has
one-time
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effect.
On the other
hand
, literacy is definitely a major breakthrough in order to reduce
world
hunger
. If a man is well educated
then
they are most likely able to get a job.
Furthermore
, reducing the amount of homeless or less privileged individuals can easily lessen the rate of the
hunger
problem
in one country. Other than that, a well-educated country or society is more likely to offer a helping
hand
to other
people
since they are more aware
about
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world
issues.
For instance
, research has shown about 60% of
hunger
problems are
centered
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centred
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around illiterate countries. To conclude, despite
food
aid
being a fast and effective solution but education is the
first
and the universal key to ending
world
hunger
in a more efficient way. Even if it is a prolonged process, educated
people
can reduce or solve poverty and starvation
problem
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in their countries once and for all.
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