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Some people believe that education is key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today there is a common belief that education is a key
of
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 tackling
hunger
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 worldwide whilst some think that
solution
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the solution
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 will be
food
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aid
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.
This
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 essay agrees that education is the main key in order to solve
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hunger
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the hunger
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problem
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 worldwide,
furthermore
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, will discuss both views. On the one
hand
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, meal
aid
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 is really uncommon since it is moderately harder. In order to help other countries in case of
hunger
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, there needs to be a group of
people
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 who are willing to help or a government
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also
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 willing to lend
their
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 helping
hand
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 which is already hard to attain.
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,
food
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aid
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 has
very
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a very
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 short helpful effect,
the
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 reason is that consumption of
food
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 will satisfy
basic
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the basic
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 needs of
people
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 without sparking them to work hard or look for a source of
food
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. To illustrate, Africa suffers the most
hunger
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problem
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 in our
world
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, but no one is helping Africa since transporting and distributing
food
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aid
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 within the African continent became extremely expensive and has
one-time
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 effect.
On the other
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hand
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, literacy is definitely a major breakthrough in order to reduce
world
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hunger
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. If a man is well educated
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 they are most likely able to get a job.
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, reducing the amount of homeless or less privileged individuals can easily lessen the rate of the
hunger
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problem
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 in one country. Other than that, a well-educated country or society is more likely to offer a helping
hand
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 to other
people
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 since they are more aware
about
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world
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 issues.
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, research has shown about 60% of
hunger
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 problems are
centered
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 around illiterate countries. To conclude, despite
food
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aid
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 being a fast and effective solution but education is the
first
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 and the universal key to ending
world
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hunger
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 in a more efficient way. Even if it is a prolonged process, educated
people
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 can reduce or solve poverty and starvation
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problem
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 in their countries once and for all.
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