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Time: 40 minutes Write at least 250 words In many countries, shops open for longer hours daily every week. What is the negative or positive effects of this on the shoppers and local community. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
 modern era, the importance of
shops
 is increasing by leaps and bounds because
shops
 are now open 7 days
in
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the
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 week and 24
hours
in
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a day. In my, opinion
this
 ideology has some advantages and disadvantages. The position of
whole time
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open
shops
 appears to be more rational. In
this
, essay we will address the positive and negative effects of
this
 trend and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. There
are
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 myriad of reasons which will
further
 explain
this
 argument but the most preponderant fact is the population is fascinated by
shops
 which are open long
hours
 owing to individuals
have
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 double shifts in organizations. Another pivotal aspect is
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 overload of work is the main reason workers
did
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 hard work in firms and
comes
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 at home late
night
 and
that
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times
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time
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 these kinds of
shops
 play a vital role.
Furthermore
, in any emergency
,.
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 For, example late
night
 accidents, and,
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 no more groceries, in that situation they provided
variety
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 of products.
Additionally
, a survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford in London revealed that people prefer shopping
in
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the
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night
rathe
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rather
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 than day due to heavy traffic jams.
Similarly
, most youngsters
is
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 purchased items
in
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night
 something of their studies.
However
, there are some pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
this
 trend.
Although
, the most alarming one is criminals and theft are do most crimes
in
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the
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night
.
Besides
, maybe, long
hours
 work
condition
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 cause
to
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cronical
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chronic
 illness
such
 as Cancer, tuberculosis, and, fever.
Moreover
, the article published in the eminent newspaper Hindustan Times depicts that individuals who
opens
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 stores for long
hours
 are suffering from anxiety, depression and mental illness.
In addition
, they reduced their creativity skills. To sum up, according to the argument aforementioned above, one can reach the conclusion, that the benefits of
open
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 stores for long
hours
 are instrumental indeed. The potential drawbacks should not be overlooked either.
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