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Some people think a rise in the standard of living in a country only seems to benefit cities more than rural areas. What problems may those differences cause? How to reduce this problem?

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In the modern age, the living standard of
people
 has increased a lot because of the plenty of employment opportunities which increase
people
's earnings.
However
, some
people
 believe that the advantages of living only affect urban
people
 rather than rural communities.
This
 essay will explore the problems caused by
this
 discrimination and find out a solution.
To begin
 with, today
people
 are more aware of their status rather than merely fulfilling their basic needs.
Therefore
, a lot of improvement in living has happened resulting in
this
 issue. Unfortunately,
this
 improvement only benefits the urban
people
 and the rural
people
 remain
backwards
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 as they were. The principal problem is
people
 who earn a lot to change their lifestyle are mostly
city
 dwellers. They migrated from the countryside to the
city
 for a better living and so on. So, their education, knowledge, and contribution to the economy are utilized for the betterment of the
city
, not the
villages
.
In addition
, the government allocates more money for the betterment of the
city
. That's why rural infrastructure and facilities remain neglected and underdeveloped. There can be several steps to be taken the solution
this
 problem.
Firstly
, the state should take the necessary measures to ensure the development of cities and
villages
.
For example
, the money allocated for the development should be properly distributed to the cities and
villages
 as well.
Moreover
,
people
 who left their
villages
 for a modern living should not forget their roots so they can come back to
villages
 and contribute to education, business, the economy and other sectors. So the rural
people
 and community would be equally benefitted. To conclude, urban and rural life should be equally patronized by the state. Citizens and states should not provide more attention to one another and ignore each other.
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