Police in some countries like England don't carry guns. Some people don't approve of this because they think that police with guns gives them security. Others think that police carrying guns decreases crimes. What is your opinion? Give relevant examples and experiences.
There is a group of countries where the
police
are not armed. People
argue against this
new concept because some feel less secure and others consider that it will contribute to diminishing the crime rate. Personally, I agree with the safety sensation when the authority
carries a gun. This
essay will discuss this
statement and provide some examples to support the argument.
In the first order of ideas, since the beginning of time, Police
officers
were well defined as impeccable people
, with high moral values, wearing their uniforms and their emblematic guns
. All of this
together defines a police
officer such
an authority
citizen who protects people
in need when are in an unsafe situation
. For example
, the moment a march past is convocated it is under the custody of the national police
officers
, for
instance
the country where I am from they are the only Add the comma(s)
instance,
people
allowed to be armed, which does not mean that in all situations it will be the best case
scenario that from the beginning till the end the people
will behave as per the expectations. But if a fortuitous case
makes the situation
out of control Police
officer are able to control the situation
easier than if they do not carry their guns
. That scenario would be scariest for those who do not like guns
at all.
On the other hand
, having this
new trend for police
officers
who do not need to carry guns
and still are an authority
symbol for the citizens, seems like a subliminal message of security. Considering the same situation
above, where parole is programmed and has to be under police
custody, I might believe that it has to be
designate a higher number of Unnecessary verb
apply
officers
to cover that event just in case
things get out of control and they have to pacify numerous groups of people
. The worst case
scenario is that one person carries a gun and the police
who is the authority
symbol is surprisingly incapable of protecting their citizens and stopping the aggressor. This
kind of situation
triggers people
's minds and develops unprotected feelings when their police
officers
are unarmed.
In conclusion, a gun is not the only way to protect people
but I strongly believe that is
fundamental equipment used by a police
officer in an emergency that ensures the protection felling to their citizens.Submitted by mantonieta.albarracin on
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Work on sentence structure to avoid run-on sentences and improve clarity. Breaking longer sentences into shorter ones can enhance readability.
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Add more specific examples and experiences to strengthen your arguments. Personal anecdotes or data can make your points more compelling.
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Ensure varied vocabulary and sentence structures to avoid repetition and maintain reader interest.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with a defined introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
You present a balanced view, acknowledging both sides of the issue before stating your opinion.
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The essay addresses the prompt effectively, discussing the main points related to police carrying guns and public safety.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite