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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

#food #drink #products #level #sugars #health #people #sugar
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it is inferred by some people that, many food and drink
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 manufactured made with a high percentage of
sugar
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, which is associated with many
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 problems, a great suggestion, was made, increase the value of products that contain
sugar
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, to help the public stay healthy, I agree with his solution and may Shade lights, chiefly. on the advantages and disadvantages. * in our daily life, we tend to consume too much
sugar
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, which actually, affects our well beings, a lot of people think that
sugar
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 is useful for their
health
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, as it provides them with energy, but a recent study has proven them wrong, as the study state that one of the merits of giving up carbohydrate, it that the individual will be more pep, and they state more benefits, like, better-sleeping habits, reduces stress, and any negative feelings, in advance of staying
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 you can
also
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 lose weight, reduce chronic headache and people that do not eat
sugar
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 are less likely to have Diabetes diseases which become so prominent in our current lifestyle,
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, a long time ago my mother felt sick when she went to the doctor he advises her to give up
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 because She is more likely to get diabetes in the long term. *
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, it's more efficient to decide to give something up to tackle the problem than raise the value of the proudest, self-determination is the key to a healthier lifestyle,
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, you can always find extra money to buy an expensive product, but once you decided to stop eating
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 it's more likely to commit. in conclusion,
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 affects our life in different ways,
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, we need to differ
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 problem to maintain Our
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 by looking at the disadvantages of
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, and trying to eat healthy food.
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