These days,a considerable amount of advertising is directed at children.Should it be banned because of the adverse effect?To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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advertisement has increased in

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should be restricted for children.because it has

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and foremost, a

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does not have

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to discriminate between right and wrong

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for them and follow their elders.

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, some advertisement podcast on television

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have eighteen plush content. So, it would be not

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ad for students.

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a student

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who watch TV,and

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comes about condom and other

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. So, it can create many sensible things.

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, some middle-class

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who not have enough money for extra expenses,and any

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student

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who have a lower background,watch TV and

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demand

for

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expensive things like watch expensive bags and toys.

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, some

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have pan Marsala content by famous

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and due to

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, many

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can try to eat that pan Marsala like

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pan Bashar by influencing that particular ad. And many increase their profit from doing

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advertisements

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and if

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would be banned. So, they can not get some profit and due to

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many can face financial crisis. On the other

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, every

children

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do not have equal power for understanding.

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other words, few

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have

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rites which

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by parents and because of

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children can able to understand distinguished about right and wrong things.

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, many

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come

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work as inspiration for them like

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many students to concentrate on

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the study

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with good quality visuals and sounds. In conclusion,

broadcast

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the broadcast

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is beneficial for some and

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aids to increase the profit

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of some

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companies.

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, many advertisements can help a

student

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to concentrate on studying

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Jan 23, 2023

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