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You have been offered a scholarship for obtaining a distance Master's degree through distance learning at a prestigious university. One of the requirements is to take a test on site once a month. Write a letter to your current employer.In your letter: • Share the news. • Explain how this will be helpful. • Ask for permission to be absent. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………..,

Dear Mr Smith, My name is Maggie Wang
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 I am currently working as a
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 Engineer in
IT
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the IT
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 department. I am writing to share some exciting news of mine with you. I recently received a full scholarship to obtain a Master's degree in
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 Science at the University of Toronto. The scholarship was awarded because I finished
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 place in a coding competition that was held by the university
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 summer. I am very excited to learn about the reward
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 the opportunity to
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 advance myself in the
computer
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 engineering field. There is no doubt that
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 will benefit my current job. I will be able to complete more projects in less time.
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, the new and most updated
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 coding language that I will study and master during the program will equip me with the most cutting-edge tools to help our company stand out from the competition. The courses will be conducted in distance learning.
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, there is an on-site test each month
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 requires me to travel to the test location.
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, I need to ask your permission to be absent from my work on the test day. Your earliest response to the request would be appreciated. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Maggie Wang

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coherence
Try to have one main idea in each paragraph. Put the news in one section and the good points in another.
coherence
Some sentences are long. Shorter ones read easier.
task
Be clear about the dates of the absence when you can, or give a range.
tone
Keep a polite tone. Use 'please' and 'thank you' to show respect.
language
Check small grammar items like 'the IT department' to help flow.
clarity
The news is clear and easy to see.
tone
The letter asks for leave in a polite way.
content
The link between study and work is stated.
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