Some people believe anyone can make art (paint, music, poetry) while others believe people with specific ability can. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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are capable of creating a masterpiece while others think that it can only be made by those who possess a certain talent. From my point of view, as we are living in a contemporary world technologies created a number of opportunities for humans along with making it possible to create
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art
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the aid of technology.
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essay will discuss both viewpoints in a depth. On the one hand, majority of the individuals in the past used to express their feelings and expressions on the
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and sculptures,
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where the technologies are well advanced, a number of
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art
in a digital format which does not take much effort and does not require a specific ability.
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, these days, most
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the aid of modern technologies as a digital form of
art
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On the other hand
,
art
like painting and music have a substantial role in improving
people
’s life quality as these fields offer good job prospects for
people
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technical
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fields like engineering and medicine require extensive training to acquire skills, and these fields do not have good job prospects. The money that they earn
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these jobs can only make
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end meet, and they cannot improve their standards of living. If
people
do the same hard work in arts and gain expertise, they get more fame and money, and they can uplift their standards of living.
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renowned artists and musicians are living a lavish lifestyle with all comforts and luxuries. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to the conclusion
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that, even without possessing a certain
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