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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant period of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. What are the advantage and disadvantage of the trend?

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It is irrefutable fact that in recent times
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 amount of
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abroad for
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 of time either to find a profession or to study. There are excellent
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benefits to doing
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However
,
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foreign
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, come across some difficulties.I personally believe that the drawbacks
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 statement far outweigh its benefits. These reasons are twofold.
First
 of all, these days more and more youngsters are learning
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foreign
 languages . Because if they learn
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foreign
 languages and will take certificate. After
this
 phenomenon, they want to go abroad for living or studying .
For instance
, if you learn
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 language.
Then
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 score from IELTS. After that, you can do
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 where in the world
such
 as
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the US
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. You can go
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 place for studying or working.
This
 phenomenon can be useful for everyone. Because they learn other countries cultures ,
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 and can take new modern things there .
Besides
,
people
also
, easily make their future
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. These things are
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 benefits.
On the other hand
,
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living
 and studying abroad have downsides.
Firstly
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at the beginning of
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a
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abroad. Because
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these
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people
 are
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for
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 newcomers .
Also
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customs do not like their
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country
.
This
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 difficulties.
Furthermore
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there are other challenges .
People
 if go
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another country
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 for
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a living
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.
This
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 some prohibitions for immigrants.
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 are
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the disadvantages
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 of living abroad. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that these days many
people
 are going
to
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abroad for living or studying. So , they
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face some difficulties there.
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